Help me choose my final hook?
On Monday I have to submit one of these sales hooks for wide distribution. Which one would most entice you to read on?
1. Fifty years after Rachel Field’s heartbreaking death, Robin Clifford Wood stepped onto the sagging floorboards of the renowned author’s long-neglected island home off the coast of Maine. Wood became enchanted by Field’s mysterious past, a life fraught with challenge, flushed with success, then buried by tragedy. The journey into Rachel’s world took Wood further than she ever dreamed possible.
2. The Field House, a unique biography-memoir, features the rugged shores of Maine, old New York, and early Hollywood. Two strong women writers – one living, one dead – share uncannily similar passions and conflicts that shape their lives. When they “meet” through the whispers of an old, neglected island home, they forge a startling friendship across time and impossible distance.
This April 10th blizzard left our backyard like Narnia under the spell of the White Witch. We flushed a great blue heron from the pond. She unfurled her great wings and lifted off like a great flying dinosaur.
Omens of unexpected beauty abound.
My 60th year in 60,000 words
Day 229: 185 words, TOTAL = 37,395; 22,605 remaining
4/10/2020 02:06:34 pm
Love your description of the GBH taking flight.
4/10/2020 04:26:54 pm
I am more drawn to the second hook - for the intriguing dimension of friendship across time. Sounds beautiful, Robin!
4/10/2020 06:00:33 pm
Thanks, Marina! I hope you're holding up okay. Take care -
4/10/2020 05:39:55 pm
Excited to read this story. I guess I prefer #1.
4/10/2020 05:40:13 pm
Gotta go with the first one
4/10/2020 06:17:35 pm
While I like them both I think as a reader the second is more intriguing and Would motivate me to invest to time to read the story of the two women.
4/10/2020 07:23:38 pm
I am also drawn to the second!
4/10/2020 07:32:50 pm
First one! But love the last sentence of the second. Could the last sentences be swapped?
4/10/2020 08:01:35 pm
That's an interesting idea, Shelby.
4/10/2020 11:39:36 pm
I like the second one :)
4/11/2020 12:58:32 am
I prefer 2. Not even sure if it’s the content or the wording, but the second seems to pull more toward the relationship between the two you rather than the story/drama of her life.
4/11/2020 04:52:26 am
Interestingly, I thought a melding of the two hooks would be most enticing. A fishing fly with a double barbed hook has a higher chance of making a catch when a nibble occurs...
4/11/2020 10:01:19 am
I prefer #1
4/11/2020 10:49:36 pm
I think I would be more likely to pick up the book with the second description. Good luck!
4/13/2020 10:04:44 am
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Robin Clifford Wood is an award-winning author, poet, and writing teacher. She lives in central Maine with her husband, loves to be outdoors, and enjoys ever-expanding horizons through her children, grandchildren, and granddogs.